I Would Like To Hear Your Opinions On These Poems I Made, Please? :)

Okay,

Drowning

I'm drowning in a cartoon motion,
Nothing around me but sea and ocean,
My arms they flail as I take my last breath,
I can feel my heart, so close to death,
How I am here I no longer know,
My pumping puso fills with woe,
Yet still further down I go,
No time to say,
Stop,
No.

AND

The Edge

I'm on the edge, I need to go,
I'll back out if I go too slow,
A step, a jump, a leap to death,
The wind in my hair, I feel it's breath,
I'm falling in the dark abyss,
I open my mouth,
But I can do nothing,
But scream.

They're not perfect, but I'm still young and unpolished! Just wanted to know what you think.