See if this is a scary story. I'm trying to write a scary (that will turn romantic) part in my fanfic, but I don't know if this piece of… cake, is creepy. Help me!!!


*Note: This happens in an afternoon. A couple is at the airport. The lights went out because of the thunderstorm, and the girl tries to scare the guy with this story*
Once upon a time, there was a boy who didn't believe in ghosts. One day, he was at the airport with this friend. Suddenly, the lights turned off.
The friend started to tell a story about a criminal that hid in the airport to escape the police, in a stormy afternoon, but got stuck and died.
That criminal wanted revenge, because nobody helped him.
The friend pointed to one corridor and told the boy that the man died in there.
The boy sinabi it was just a stupid story, and his friend challenged him to go to that corridor.
And so he did.
In that moment, the figure of a man with his back turned to the boys appeared behind him.
The friend, in shock, pointed to the ghost, speechless.
The boy turned around and the ghost did the same.
The creepy ghost started to float towards them.
The boy and his friend were paralyzed.
The ghost possessed the body of the boy.
The boy, possessed, killed his friend and cut him in pieces with his own hands.
His soul is now searching for revenge.
This is an unbreakable chain.
A ghost wants revenge, kills, and the ghost of the dead person wants revenge as well, and kills too.
They attack in stormy days, and cut us in pieces.
MWAHAHAHAH!!!

*Sorry if this is lame, sorry if my English is bad, and sorry if I made you waste your time. I just want to know if this is scary enough. If we were at the airport, in a stormy afternoon, then probably yeah. But still, I think I could have done better. Give me suggestions if you want! Please!*