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Please read, and then help me with a title... thnk you!

The thought


I see my mother in my brain and smile.
“can you believe it?” asks Blake. I shake my head, no, looking down from the burol sitting on a boulder. Looking at the battlefield from this height kind of makes me scared, but from all of the things that have happened to me I wash the fear out of my brain.
“Trudy? What is going through your head now? You look sad… and happy at the same time,” Asked blake in his usual, soft, voice.
“I remember the araw I have left my mother and father to go here… today … to save our world… but, what do I do now… we can’t go back and I can’t do anything here. All of my mga kaibigan I met here have died,” I say raising my voice and getting madder and madder.
I stop my concentration on the ground below us and stare at blake. He flinched as I talked more.
“This is your entire fault! I wouldn’t have left my house if you hadn’t been my”—
A pain in my feet rose up into my whole body.
“Trudy!” shouted blake. I fell to the ground on all of my fours. “Forget it!” I sputter. “Trudy I know it has been a hard few hours but,”—
“12! 12 hours,” I say.
“Yes, thank you, but that doesn’t mean that we can’t have a good time, does it?” blake says helping me up. I sit on the boulder.
“Today is my birthday, I am 13 now, and I won’t see my father nor mother neither will I see a delicious cake that says happy birthday”—I hold back tears, but one falls down my cheek—“Trudy!” I yell and it echoes.
blake tries to calm me down, but I sob madami and more. Finally it hits blake that he won’t be able to see his father (his mother had died earlier) and I see him gulp in fear.
“Is there a way we can get out?” he says now in his small scared voice. I shake my head. “One, we have these stupid charm bracelets that, that evil guy gave us. And two, even if we didn’t have the bracelets on, then I would still not know where the portal is,”
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I look down at my wrist. The charm bracelet has one charm of a silver heart. I take my stare of the charm bracelet off and get up from the boulder. “Trudy what are you doing?” asked blake. I step on the edge of the burol and stare at the 500 foot drop. “Don’t jump! Trudy! Don’t jump!” blake yells. I ignore him and let his words past me.
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wolfclan121 said:
ok first madami punctuation and swap mind with brain since it just sounds weird and out of line titles um.... i dont know cuz i dont really understand what its about
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srry, its botu this girl and boy and they have been mga kaibigan since birth, and then this guy says they have to save the world yada yada yada and then they do but then there stuck.
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SueLuvsVJ101 said:
Nice one! I think it should be called 'Alone'. You might wanna try Pagsulat it more, well.....IDK, School wiseXD
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lol
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Moonlight_Kitty said:
I can see where you need to edit a couple of things, other than that it's great. I want to know madami about this story.

As for a title, that's going to be hard. I can think up some good ones but I need to know madami about the story.

Here are some titles from the tuktok of my head, you can use these as ideas for a better title....
'Battle Ground'
'Runaways'
'Search for freedom' (sorry if it sounds cheesy)
'Escape'
remember these are just simple ideas you can use to think of a title.
I hope this helps. :)
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those are good ones! :)
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