would you read this?

This, I'd read.

It seems really different; something you'd never expect. I definetly didn't expect this t be the plot! I think it's excellent and unique, combining slight romance and action. I say go for it!

Ehh probably not. Unless you have a damn good and interesting explanation for why the guys are so interested in her, it just sounds weird and like it won't make sense. You'd have to come up with an entire backstory about the legacy thing, I dunno, something supernatural maybe, except it would have to be original too. *shrugs* Plus, eighth graders generally annoy the hell out of me so I wouldn't want to read about them. I'd suggest bumping the age of the girl up a few years to get madami readers. The step-sister thing is also too cliche to use as a main plot point, but as a side thing it doesn't really matter. So basically, if there's madami to the legacy thing and just madami to the whole story I'd give it a go, but from that little tidbit it sounds boring.