uy Guys!! Here's some short songs I wrote....give me your opinions and suggestions...hope you like 'em

The first one is called 'Hi friend':
All the minutos I spent with you
were always what I wanted to do

When you were far away
Everyday I used to pray..For you to come back home..
For you to come back home...

SO Hi friend..Hi again
You really made me feel the pain
SO Hi friend..Hi again
You really made me feel the pain

When everybody left me alone
When everybody left me home
Anybody I wanted to find..Then I found you sa pamamagitan ng my side..

SO Hi friend..Hi again
You really made me feel the pain
SO Hi friend..Hi again
You really made me feel the pain


The segundo one is The Sun Will Bright..it's a duet:


Guy:
pag-awit this song
Feeling alone
where all my mga kaibigan are gone?
I tried to scream
I tried to fight
I tried to keep my head up high

Girl:
I know it's hard to be alone
I know it's hard to get along
You have to keep holding on
Cus..I'll help you to fight
I'll spend the night
With you sa pamamagitan ng my side
The sun will bright

Guy:
I was alone
I was afraid
Until she came
Until she said

Both:
I'll help you to fight
I'll spend the night
With you sa pamamagitan ng my side
The sun will bright

Both:
So if you're angry
If you wanna hide
Just keep smiling
Just keep trying
Cus the sun will bight...