This is the first story i've written so please tell me what you think
I was in the worst pain imaginable.
I was burning.
There were people talking but i had no idea what they were saying, their voices were too quick for me to hear no matter how hard i listened.If i was on apoy then why weren't they helping me?why didn't they put it out?the pain was too much too bare, thinking about it only made it worse so i tried to remeber how this burning had started to help keep me pre-occupied...
The last thing i remember was walking out of the jewellers, i had just had my ring resized and i was in a rush to pick it up before the store closed. i was too late though and the Jewllers had already closed. It was as i turned to walk away that i saw the most beautiful pale faces i had ever seen-their beauty was painful even to think about it-staring back at me.They came towards me then and everything became dark.Their were three of them one,the female, had long brunette hair with natural looking blonde highlights, grown just past her waste she was so graceful looking it made me want to cry. One of males was tall about 6ft9inches with curly hair grown down to his chin his arm was wrapped around the female so i assumed they were together. The segundo male had short midnight black hair and was so charming even in silence. The last thing i saw was the sparkle of their skin disappear as the sunset, and the colour of their eyes.Their bright crimson eyes.
to be continued...
I was in the worst pain imaginable.
I was burning.
There were people talking but i had no idea what they were saying, their voices were too quick for me to hear no matter how hard i listened.If i was on apoy then why weren't they helping me?why didn't they put it out?the pain was too much too bare, thinking about it only made it worse so i tried to remeber how this burning had started to help keep me pre-occupied...
The last thing i remember was walking out of the jewellers, i had just had my ring resized and i was in a rush to pick it up before the store closed. i was too late though and the Jewllers had already closed. It was as i turned to walk away that i saw the most beautiful pale faces i had ever seen-their beauty was painful even to think about it-staring back at me.They came towards me then and everything became dark.Their were three of them one,the female, had long brunette hair with natural looking blonde highlights, grown just past her waste she was so graceful looking it made me want to cry. One of males was tall about 6ft9inches with curly hair grown down to his chin his arm was wrapped around the female so i assumed they were together. The segundo male had short midnight black hair and was so charming even in silence. The last thing i saw was the sparkle of their skin disappear as the sunset, and the colour of their eyes.Their bright crimson eyes.
to be continued...
hi i dont know what to call this but heres the first chapter if you have any ideas tell me
"Alice we don't need to dress up it's just high school.again." I sinabi under my breath.
"Oh come on Bella can't you let me have some fun today."
"Fine." I sinabi giving up trying to argue with Alice. Alice had me in dark washed skinny jeans and high heel ankle boots,with a purple long-sleeved layered casual t.
"Just today though."Not wanting her to get the wrong idea that i would let her do this everyday.
"Agreed.Now stay still I'm almost finished.
"Time to go Renesemee,Jacob."I yelled upstairs. Jacob was now moved in with us we all pretty much not breath anymore but we had to get used to it again since we can go to schol again beacause renesemee is 7 now and stoped ageing
"Alice we don't need to dress up it's just high school.again." I sinabi under my breath.
"Oh come on Bella can't you let me have some fun today."
"Fine." I sinabi giving up trying to argue with Alice. Alice had me in dark washed skinny jeans and high heel ankle boots,with a purple long-sleeved layered casual t.
"Just today though."Not wanting her to get the wrong idea that i would let her do this everyday.
"Agreed.Now stay still I'm almost finished.
"Time to go Renesemee,Jacob."I yelled upstairs. Jacob was now moved in with us we all pretty much not breath anymore but we had to get used to it again since we can go to schol again beacause renesemee is 7 now and stoped ageing
Hi my name is Amanda and I have helped a few people out on fanpop. I'm in a college English course and wanted to put up and ad for myself! Anyone looking for an editor for there tagahanga fiction I'm the one. I do not changes stories I just add madami descriptive elements like how stephanie Myers is so descriptive. You can email your story at CoolMandyz43@Aol.com and then I will send them back to you and you can post it or change somethings I did. I would pag-ibig to write my own tagahanga fiction but I'm not a great idea person but I can really edit stories to the point of perfection! So anyone who wants a helping POV get at me!
