Young Justice OC'S!!! Article: Operation S.N.O.W. Prolouge. The Enemy At The Gates.

Operation S.N.O.W. Prolouge. The Enemy At The Gates.

posted by Lyla_YJ

First RA artikulo for me! But I have permision.....so you kinda have to consult Twan first.... ENJOY!

Alaska.

Lyla supervised the RA sniper training. She pointed out mistakes and corrected them, hard. She watched each soldier carefully.
"Get down there! Dont cheat yourself soldiers!" Lyla shouted, as they where doing warm-up push-ups. Lyla clapped once, indicating warm up was over. They stood up.
"Snipers hot!" Lyla barked. Then all of the soldiers-to-be took their mga baril off safe.
"On the ground!" Lyla barked. They dropped to the ground. Lyla gave a signal and they positioned their snipers.
"Fire!" Lyla signaled. The aimed and hit moving targets. Lyla nodded in amusement.
"Up! Now!" She barked. They stood up. Lyla walked down an aisle of the soldiers-to-be, she corrected loose stance, corrected loose sniper's and ammunition, she barked madami orders, for hours and hours. After hours of training, they were allowed to go to the bunkers. She stayed in a bunker, since she was away from home, she had to. Twan and Joey were back in gotham preparing other soldiers-to-be.

She lay there, unable to sleep. She told herself it was all the coffee, but she didnt belive it. She was anxtious. She tossed and turned. She jumped out of kama and grabbed her sniper. She walked out of the bunkers, and relived a RA soldier from duty and took his place. She stood guard of the relatively small base. She didnt get tired, she some how, just, stayed awake the whole time. Morning approached, she still stood gaurd, taking madami shifts. She spoke into her earpeice as she heard something,
"Prepare for enemy forces." She sinabi quietly readying and dropping to the snow covered ground. She readied her sniper and looked through the scope. Her eyes widened.
"Operation. Snow." She sinabi into her earpeice.

Yeah, a little short, so yeah.....exciting aint it?

Gunfire Nice, rally nice.

Lyla_YJ ^.^

-BelovedRobin Do you really want my feedback?

Lyla_YJ I dont know.....do I?

-BelovedRobin I don't know I'm not you.

Lyla_YJ Ok....then yes?

Obscurity98 me like!

Lyla_YJ Yay!

-BelovedRobin Remember this is just my opinion, take it or leave it I don't care. I'm not saying this because I believe I am a better writer than you, I am saying this as the feedback you wanted. For starters, length is whatever: short or long it doesn't matter to me. However, was this piece an attention grabber. No. There was no hook to snatch the reader by their throat and secure them throughout the piece. The commentary was rather plain and didn't create an image for me to picture. Just Lyla commanding soldiers. There wasn't any whimsical aspect to create a mood or tone throughout the piece, it was just flat line. If anything, I suggest. SUGGEST. To add more depth and emotion. You're trying to get the reader to experience the story not read it. Also, widen your vocabulary range. If you continue to say, "Lyla bark." I will start to think she is a dog. Remember this is my opinion, not anybody else. I am just trying to give as much feedback as I can. Will continue to read this series? That's still up in the air.

Lyla_YJ Feedback if helpfull! ^.^ I'll use that.

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CoaxochYJ And that relates to this.....how?

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Dead or Alive

posted by SilverWings13

Until I get a chance for a listahan of short bios, here's the statuses of OCs written about/ created/ killed in the last year. There may be a couple whom you don't recognize, so feel free to ask any tanong in the comment section below!

Among the Living:

Nic Canis
Declan Conners & Dane Conners (married)
Riley Jr. Conners
Aleksander Felis
Noëlle Felis
Gabriel of House Graecus
Coda and Adam Kenway (siblings)
Pollux and Bellamy Serpente (siblings)
Vika Vernadskaya
Sasha Vernadsky
Aryess "Angel" Weston
Kai & Amara (haven't discussed with McL if we're hyphenating or what yet, but these are Ary's and Bentley's twins)
Michel
Abaddon "Don"

Deceased:

Jedediah Cage
Roxanne Weston and Riley Sr. Conners (married)
Daemian Conners
Tommy Felis
Persephone "Percy" of House Graecus
Venus "Aphrodite" of House Graecus
Jasper Kenway
Nereus Marina
Castor Serpente
Sansa Vernadskaya
Maivus "Whisper" de Vent

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Running

posted by GlitterPuff

WARNING: NOT YJ RELATED WHATSOEVER
I WROTE IT FOR MY CREATIVE Pagsulat COURSE
~~~~~

Every araw she ran.

When she ran, her puso would beat faster and faster. Sweat poured down her body as she came to a stop, catching her breath. Her hands on her knees, back a bit hunched, her breathing labored. The concrete beneath her collected the drips that fell off of her and made a satisfying splatter, the kalye now becoming somewhat of a work of art. Standing back up, arching her back slightly as a small stretch, she began her run back home, holding one hand over her heart.

Running had always been her escape....

OC:Matrix

posted by khanna266

name:Matrix Ynieva
age:20
species:dark angel and human
alias:Matrix
allegiance:villain
appearance:Black hair dark eyes tall black angel wings pale skinned
powers:shoots balls of plasma out of his hands,controls tornadoes,black magic,flying,and can kill people with his mind,but only if he's looking at them

*He is Ashton's sworn nemesis and vows to kill him.

*he was ibingiay birth to sa pamamagitan ng a dark angel and a human so he has been looking for a way to make him a full fledged dark angel,and will kill anybody who gets in his way.

Bio:He was born in the sands of Egypt under a full moon and his mother died giving...

A Royal Invitation

posted by Robin_Love

Her Royal Highness

Please post a response to your character(s) pagbaba this. Might become a story. madami than likely will just stay a one shot. But I might get inspired sa pamamagitan ng some responses.

You are hereby required and invited to attend her royal Highness,
Princess Rebecca Uccello Alvers' grand ball.
In honor of her royal birth petsa of eighteen years.

Arrangements have been made in honor of your arrival.
An escort is ready to welcome you
to our kingdom. As our honored guests, you are permitted,
but not required, to bring one guest.

In high hopes and regards, with sincerest wishes, we hope you will attend.

Her Imperial Highness,
reyna Minerva Alvers.

Princess Rebecca Uccello Alvers

Deception~ Part 10

posted by BladeYJ

((I'm here to apologize...I should give up on this since the last time I posted was over three months ago...But I can't I need to finish for the sake of Blade and the fact that is change her as an OC, so I'm giving a brief summary for those who haven't read or don't remember from the other parts. BASICALLY Blade wakes up. Has memory. Goes to find terror and get away from rapey Damian. Finds out terror is "with" a girl..and goes back to Damian. He basically makes her forget who she is sa pamamagitan ng shooting her up like some drugs btw those who haven't realized she's also missing her left eye, that's YOUR...

A bad araw

posted by khanna266

Klei was outside in the rain walking around listening to her music.She had a really rough day. First she was late for school and got detention for the first time ever.Then her and August got into a fight.Then Elliot didn't answer her calls,and just to tuktok it all off her sister was on her honeymoon in Paris so she missed her badly."Why did this have to happen to me?"she thought aloud,she wished that the araw could just end.She then found a really nice puno and sat under it.She kept wishing her sister was here to comfort her like she usually would."I really really miss Ari"she cried and cried...

annabelle Hawthorne *Update*

added by Lollipop97

Source: Me

The Power of the Hexagons (part 15)

posted by Kurls_Basd

Ultra-Guardian, aka reyna Beetles/Alanna's first daughter, aka Serenity. Current status: Missing.

Queen Beetle walked up and down in front of Kaya, whose one cheek was sore from the slaps. Kaya's eyes followed the reyna she was trying her best not to laugh the embarrassed woman.
"Why did you agree to let my people take the Hexagons?" reyna Beetle asked.
"I thought it was the only way you and I could talk without my husband and the others getting suspicious," Kaya replied smiling.
"Get out." reyna Beetle order guards at the door. They obey and exited. reyna Beetle addressed Kaya, "You embarrassed...

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Darling Princess

posted by Robin_Love

She fell back on her bed, hair sprawling out around her. She kicked off her shoes and stared at the blank ceiling, humming softly. Her eyes closed for a bit, trying to block out the pile of math work that would bring headaches and no sleep that night. If there was one thing she could change about school, it would be the option of taking math at all. Sighing she opened her eyes and grabbed her iPod for a few minutos of escape. She pulled a pagbaba book from her bag and opened it where she had left off last.
Page after page, she soaked in the story as if it were her own. The music in the background...

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New Oc :)

posted by Mclovin_69

Name: Chatham Prewitt ( Chat-um)

Alias: Phase

Age: 17

Appearance: short pixie cut black hair, deep brown eyes.

Personality: She will laugh at almost anything, she can't help it how much she laughs at the smallest things. she a Tomboy.

Abilities/Powers: she has the ability to stop time for a moment in time, whether it be dodging an attack or just to confuse her opponent. To others it may seem like she has super speed but she can ilipat at the speed of light when freezing the time.

Relationship: Single

Civvies: black tights, with toms, crewnecks, long sleeves, sweaters.

Past :Unknown

Others: sometimes her powers back apoy on here and she stuns herself and gets short term memory loss.

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Light Em Up

posted by Robin_Love

1st-Becca

It's only long because it's a song-fic..

Oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa.
Oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa, oh, oh, whoa.

The air reeked of sulfuric acid as dark, smoggy clouds hung in the air. The ground was fruitless dirt that crunched under their feet every time they walked. A dry wind blew through the desolated valley. A firm grip held his shoulder and he gave the slightest nod before the other five moved ahead. As he expected, they were met with an attack. What seemed like hundreds of enemies surrounded them with the intent to kill.

B-B-B-Be careful making wishes in...

The Power of the Hexagons (part 8)

posted by Kurls_Basd

Jaivus Telepathic Torture
Jaivus clinched his teeth at the sight before him. He was standing on the mountain that stood before the Beetle settle.
"Honesty Where are you?!"
"I'm right here." from behind Jaivus
"What the hell are you up to?"
"Not much....just sifting your mind to find out how my traitor parents were dealt with...should be entertaining"
"I'm not going to let you do that."
"What? You have intentions of stopping me?"
"Yes i do"
"If your intention is to fight me then I must disappoint it would've been nice to have a mental battle with you dear brother, but I have other things i must attend...

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New Oc

posted by Mclovin_69

Name: Seeker ( from his planet that is all he is known as, it will explain in his past.) His host is named Seth.

Alias: none.

Age: 1'000'000 but looks young from his host who is 17.

Appearance: White hair and light blue eyes, his host had dark hair with hazel eyes..

Species: Alien

Powers/Abilities: other than being able to control the body of his host and be able to see their memories. none.

Personality: unlike what most of his species is like, he is very caring for his host and doesn't want to send his species to attack the earth.

Relationship: Single.

Past: ( I got this from the movie the host sorta,...

The Power of the Hexagons (Part 5)

posted by Kurls_Basd

"What'd you mean you give her permission?!" Koda asked harshly. with the other two young men Superboy and Akash behind him with their arms fold.
"Lelisa been coming over at our house pretty offend and I kept telling her to tell Alanna do what they wanted so I guess they did." Kaya said, finishing with a slight smile on her face.
"Have you Nawawala your mind? What's wrong with you?Do you have any idea what you've done?!! And..."Koda yelled at her but was interrupted.
"Of course I know want i'm doing!" Kaya yelled back.
"Then what are you doing?" Akash asked quietly from the back.
"Alanna wants to show...

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Yin and Yang

posted by Robin_Love

Haru

Warning you now; don't expect anything from the original character based off of the pics. Some things I will mimic but I give full credit to the ideas I use to those who created the original character. I promise, I'm not stealing. And I always use anime pics anyways. Just an FYI. Ok. Enjoy!!

Name: Haru
Alias: Yin/Yang
Occupation: Varied
Powers: Acrobatics, Martial Arts Expert, Can turn every araw objects into weapons, Staff, Nun-chucks, Daggers, Shuriken, Sais
History: Haru is not his real name. He uses it as an alias to his real name due to a traumatic past he has all but forgotten. Sometime during...

Another OC!Anya

posted by khanna266

Anya leaving home

Name:Anya Sonia Tassia
age:16
alias:Angel
Species:angel
hero outfit: black pants,blacktanktop,black sanals black mask
civvies:nothing special changes a lot
powers:sorcery,brings back the dead(only if she wants to),flying, preminitions,and telekinisis,
BG story:Anya came to America leaving the Russian Revolution with her family on a plane on her 16th birthday when the plane crashed and the whole family died,and she was turned into an angel.After a few years she decided she wanted to come back to earth to stay so God let her in return of her wings,so her wings were clipped and she fell to earth.

<3<3<3 hope you enjoyed!

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Last of the Sparrow

posted by Robin_Love

“You think I would give you that opportunity?”
“I think you'll have no choice.”
She looked at him, amusement in her eyes.
“You presume much.”
He smiled and opened his mouth to speak again but was cut off when Bruce came to the mic, asking for everyone to sumali in the mag-ihaw for Devin. She watched as her dance partner moved quickly off the floor and up to the make-shift stage. She glanced about before making her way out the door and towards the front door. Alfred handed her the amerikana she'd worn.
“It was good to see you again, Ms. Stevens.”
“Same to you Alf. Watch over all of them for...

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MY OC supervillian #3 bio

posted by Kurls_Basd

Salil

Name: Salil
Hero name: doesn't have one
Powers: Controls water
Appearance: Blue hair and eyes.
Age:18 yrs
Abilities: combat fighter. Salil is able to control every drop of blood in persons body. He can cause their blood to rush to their head to knock them unconscious. Good with any musical instruments.
Relations: Lelisa boyfriend.
Attitude: Charmer, flirtation
Statue:Aquanason. Fugitive of the Aquanason kingdom.
History&Past: Salil grew up with a mother and father that loved their job madami than they loved him. His parents worked for the King of the Aquanason, Ashley's father. Wanting attention...

A story of bulluts and blades, (Proloug)

posted by godmor

Gun in a earlyer time

Ooc: oke fore this I wil just make it so the rare oc's in here knowe mga baril situation whit the various conon carcters in this as I don't want to writ tons of one schots explaining them, the most imprtand whit Barbra Gordon alredy have a serie on here anyway.
Also some of the conon caraters wil be in some role frome the dc univer, other frome there young justice rol, and others a combination of bothe, this is needed fore sertain story elemends.
Nowe thad is sinabi here is the story.

Twan sat on the chouse whit Mafia waching tv,when the phone rang, tess who just walked into the room picked up the phone....

Little Boy!OC (please read)

posted by khanna266

name:Adaam Wyatt
age:9
alias:Denver
civvies:nothing special
hero suit:tight black pants and sando w/ black ankle boots.
weapon:fire sword
powers:manipulates fire,superspeed,cloning,black magic,and is an empath
BG story:He was Minions nephew and used to help him out until one araw he decided he wanted to be good and make a difference and only tumawid and Lily trust him,but he's very kindhearted and gentle,he's also has his moments where he gets alittle bit sensitive,but he's really tough and cool.

<3<3<3 hope you liked it.

Adaam scared