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Here it is “Alia honey, time for breakfast!” Mrs. Penrose, Alia’s mother interrupted as she slightly opened her door. “Ok mom” Alia said. She turned toward her new friends. “Let’s go”. “Fine, but can we take the elevator this time?” asked Kylie. “Sure” Alia said. They headed toward the elevator. “Where you going” sinabi a walang tiyak na layunin voice out of no were. The three mga kaibigan turned around it was Alia’s older sister Amelia, but they called her Amy for short. She was tall. She had long blond hair like their mom’s.
    “We’re going to breakfast” Alia answered. “Me too” Amy sinabi as she rushed toward the elevator. She went in and the doors closed before they could get in. “Well I guess we have to wait, because the other elevators are broken” Kylie sinabi as she put her hands on her skinny hips.

The big, silvery elevator finally came up. The three people jumped in and their Aso followed them. “Ok the kusina is on the segundo floor” Alia told Daniel. Daniel went toward the big brown buttons. “Ok” Daniel sinabi “Wait, what’s this button?” he asked as his figure went toward it. “No don’t push it!” Alia and Kylie sinabi in unison. But it was too late. Daniel pressed the button and the elevator went downward. Kylie and Alia glared at Daniel. The elevator was still moving down rapidly. “Sorry” Daniel said. The elevator finally came to a halt.
    The doors of the elevator swung open. The three walked in slowly curious on what was in that room.”This place is really dusty” Kylie said. She took out her special handkerchief from her bag and began wiping at some dirt. Suddenly they heard a whimper, it was Alia’s dog, and she heard something. Then the ground began to shake. The ground began clanking. The dust lingered of the walls of the gigantic room. Without warning, the room was covered with unwanted fog. They couldn’t see a thing. Finally, the fog cleared, the walls looked brand new but the floor was covered in a du
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(continueing) sty muck. Then they heard a scream “Help!” sinabi a voice. It sounded like Kylie but when they looked at her she wasn’t screaming. “Help, Help!” it sinabi again. This time it sounded madami familiar. “Amy! Where are you are you ok?” Alia screamed, “Alia! I’m fine, I’m behind a large rock, but be careful there’s a…” She stopped suddenly. “What was she going to say?” Daniel asked. “I don’t know” Kylie replied as they walked near a giant gray boulder. The gigantic rock was big enough to block the whole entryway but there was a small crack large enough for Alia, Kylie, Daniel and their Aso to squeeze through. In the crack Alia could see Amelia’s feet with her new designer boots. The three of them squished in though the crack then their mouths dropped. Chapter 2: They stared in amazement when they saw before them a large dragon. He was a dark shade of blue and silver, he had teeth sharper then a needle and a shark’s tooth combined. He had a long swishing tail and humongous wings and he was sitting in an oversized pile of gold, rubies, emeralds and other gemstones. “Why are you here? Why are you all in my cave?” The dragon sinabi angrily as he swished his tail back in forth. “We didn’t mean to, and this is not your cave its part of Alia’s house!” Daniel sinabi bravely. “What did you say?” the dragon yelled. “Wait, what’s your name?” asked Alia stalling the dragon from hurting Daniel. “My name, I don’t think I have a name.” The dragon sinabi lowering his head. “And I don’t have any mga kaibigan either” He began looking even madami furious then before. “It’s ok we’ll be your friends!” Kylie said. Alia and Daniel nodded. There Aso seemed to be nodding too. “Well in the mean time I’m leaving” Amelia sinabi as she snuck through the crack.”We can be your friends, and we can give you a name” sinabi Kylie happily as she bounced up and down. “How about Jeremy?” asked Daniel? “Jeremy, why Jeremy?” asked the dragon? “How about Pete?” answered Alia. “I don’t really like it” sinabi the dragon. “I know, how about Dale?” Kylie said. “Sure” Dragon sinabi “I will be Dale”. “Well we have to go” Alia said. “Wait before you go take this” Dale told Alia. He held out a beautiful kuwintas with a big purple dragon with Esmeralda eyes. “It’s a dragon necklace” he added. “Thanks!” Alia said. “Bye” they all sinabi and went toward the silver elevator. Alia looked at her new necklace, the dragon seemed to wink at her.
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Frankiestein65 said:
I pag-ibig it! You should totally continue it.
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Mariya_Maja said:
you have too much * he said, Kylie said, Alia said, Amy said, Kylie said, Daniel said..*...always repeating.. BUT It is very a contagious and makes you read on ... very well..so good ... :) ^ 3 ^ (♥^.^♥)
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