An idea popped into my head the other araw and its been playing like a little movie in my head ever since. I really need to know if its any good, or if the idea has already been used. Also I need payo for the characters and their names. I also appreciate constructive criticism and grammar and spelling. The names are temporary. I've never written a book that is completely in the present tense so please help me catch any tense mistakes! Um, oh yeah. It doesn't have a pamagat yet so if you have any suggestions just let me know!
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short prebiyu of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank you Mrs. Monrale, you too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a prebiyu of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah sinabi the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in pag-ibig with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be music to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up pag-ibig notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short prebiyu of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank you Mrs. Monrale, you too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a prebiyu of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah sinabi the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in pag-ibig with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be music to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up pag-ibig notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
blood fills the faces of my fantasies
no mercy,you're trying to put me down
i can see clearly as you're taking a ugoy at me
come and i'll push you to the ground
what are you doing? what do you think this is doing to me?
you're taking all my faith
what are you leaving me now?!
i will make you suffer just like you made me suffer
i will watch you screaming and begging for forgiveness
all my hate can not be bound
i will not be bound sa pamamagitan ng your darkest demons
so try to take my life and put me to the ground
i will follow you and torture you and i'll watch you screaming
look at the bloody faces smiling at you,taking you down and making you drown
i wanna kill you the same way you killed me
leaving me thoughtless
you can try to tell me that i'm worthless
but you can not break me down
gonna take you down because nothing in this world is going to save me
no mercy,you're trying to put me down
i can see clearly as you're taking a ugoy at me
come and i'll push you to the ground
what are you doing? what do you think this is doing to me?
you're taking all my faith
what are you leaving me now?!
i will make you suffer just like you made me suffer
i will watch you screaming and begging for forgiveness
all my hate can not be bound
i will not be bound sa pamamagitan ng your darkest demons
so try to take my life and put me to the ground
i will follow you and torture you and i'll watch you screaming
look at the bloody faces smiling at you,taking you down and making you drown
i wanna kill you the same way you killed me
leaving me thoughtless
you can try to tell me that i'm worthless
but you can not break me down
gonna take you down because nothing in this world is going to save me
The araw of love,
Is here again,
This is tough,
From end to end,
A joyus occasion,
Is our salvation,
Without you,
I would be empty,
No one sa pamamagitan ng my side,
No one to embrace me when I'm tired,
Stuck within a baracading window,
Wishing oh so much,
That you would show,
Just another day,
Where I would have to sit here and say,
Alone again,
Always alone,
Behind these eyes are tears of love,
You are my one true,
Thank you honey,
For being with me,
I pag-ibig you so,
Please,
Never ever leave me
sa pamamagitan ng ScottishChic, dedicated to all whom I pag-ibig x
Is here again,
This is tough,
From end to end,
A joyus occasion,
Is our salvation,
Without you,
I would be empty,
No one sa pamamagitan ng my side,
No one to embrace me when I'm tired,
Stuck within a baracading window,
Wishing oh so much,
That you would show,
Just another day,
Where I would have to sit here and say,
Alone again,
Always alone,
Behind these eyes are tears of love,
You are my one true,
Thank you honey,
For being with me,
I pag-ibig you so,
Please,
Never ever leave me
sa pamamagitan ng ScottishChic, dedicated to all whom I pag-ibig x
Hello my name is Cristina Xtri ,i am 15 years old and i pag-ibig every singer's songs because SONG IS MY LIFE and also if singers wasn't even here exist then there would be no songs and i wouldn't even listen to song but now singers are here my life in on a ROCK AND ROLL!!!! WELL want to say something i pag-ibig every singer's songs well they are GREAT for me it is my LIFE!!
SINGERS THAT I KNOW :Katy Perry, Taylor Swift, Nicki Minaj,Justin Bieber, Rihanna, Ariana Grande, Selena Gomez,Jennifer Lopez, well i just pag-ibig every singers !!
Well i wish all the singer a big GOOD LUCK!!!! and also i pag-ibig every songs well they are great!! uy all the singers make madami song for me please want to see madami !!! well just pag-ibig every singer!!, well my paborito song is WORK sa pamamagitan ng Rihanna and what is yours?
SINGERS THAT I KNOW :Katy Perry, Taylor Swift, Nicki Minaj,Justin Bieber, Rihanna, Ariana Grande, Selena Gomez,Jennifer Lopez, well i just pag-ibig every singers !!
Well i wish all the singer a big GOOD LUCK!!!! and also i pag-ibig every songs well they are great!! uy all the singers make madami song for me please want to see madami !!! well just pag-ibig every singer!!, well my paborito song is WORK sa pamamagitan ng Rihanna and what is yours?